Peer Response 2 Week 12

Response to Pauline's "Week #12-Free Entry"

I think that this is a nice start to a draft. I wonder however, if "[b]old and beautiful" is the right description to start with. It seems to fall short compared to the other descriptions like"[i]t glides like the birds fly" and "[l]ike a vagabond lover." I can't help but to think of Plath's Medallion" every time I read a poem contributed to a snake. I wonder what you might take from her that could improve this draft? Perhaps expansion could help. I, personally, would like to see more description of this snake that you have conjured so well and more unexpected language/comparisons throughout. Good luck and I look forward to the next draft.