Response to Jenna's "Week Eleven - Free Write - New England Prostitutes"
I’m going to be very honest with you. I was super excited to see this draft, I quite literally laughed out loud. With that said, Pauline and MacKenzie both have good points. This draft already produces some instances of awesomeness. Definitely keep everything that Mackenzie suggested in addition to, "everywhere is downtown.” I, like MacKenzie, enjoyed “tree-droppings” because, well, it's funny. I must disagree with Pauline’s suggestion of adding “cottage” to the end. I don’t feel (in my opinion) that it’s necessary. I believe the idea is interesting and the draft lends that they're not really supposed to be there since they’re “cobblestoned in.” It may work better if “in to” was changed to “into.”
I, too, think it would be interested to know more about these "working girls." Besides, the draft could get really creative with this portion. I look forward to the next draft and assume I will be seeing it next Monday. (:
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