Response to Pauline's "Week 5 Free Entry"
I meant to post a response to this entry last week but simply ran out of time.
There are so many changes to this draft that I admire. It is clear that the draft has been revised to accommodate our suggestions and it does it well. Some of my favorite changes occur with these lines: “Don’t suffer the strain of trying to change / your ingrained ways of wording a muddle: / The rambunctious rain wrought Wednesday a puddle,” and again with “Indulge the urge to rip slang words / such as skank or wack in your cracks at rhyme.” There were several more than this but then I realized that I had too many. Alright one more: “you can always put in some stray prosthetic / to bestow a sense of symmetry,” because it’s so incredibly witty, Pauline. I looked for something to critique but I truly did not find anything.
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