In response to Pauline's "Week #1--Free Entry"
There is some powerful language and unforgettable imagery in this piece, Pauline. I especially enjoyed the last line, “slyly seasoned with dander.” But I wonder would what happen if you were to expand this piece. Forgive me, this is usually what I say to my peers that I feel have a poem with great potential. (: You might consider letting go of some of the alliteration in order to expand more or perhaps adding in more details about the felines surroundings. Maybe a story line would beef it up and allow room to add in more of the language and imagery that you have conjured already in this work. Hope I helped.
Brandy
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